Site content - Critique request.

[aspwiz]

Hi...

I have a duplicate website on a development server where I am uploading new copy changes to.... I'll make all the changes on this server until I'm happy with it and then move it across to the live site....

Copy has been changed on the 'home' page, the 'custom / bespoke' page, the 'axles' and 'foundations' pages as well as the about us page.

Does anyone have any opinions regarding the new copy?? Is it too 'SELL SELL SELL'??

The development server with the new changes on is here:- http://dotmagic.dynu.com/

The old copy (live website) link is in my signiture.

Thanks for opinions

[scottiecl]

I like it!

No, it's not cheesy hard-sell, it is informative hard-sell with benefits to convert potential customers.

Very nice~ :)

[Blue]

I agree with Scottie as far as the copy goes.

But, I also like the old format in which you showcased your flagship products right on the front page. Maybe a combination of the new copy followed by the flagship showcase?